Edward
08-04-2007, 02:40 AM
the threads of plot I've set up for myself have become loose and unraveled, worse yet everything is starting to seem cliched to me.
The story in a nutshell (hey, get my story out of that nutshell!): a guy lives with his sick sister, something falls from the sky, he checks it out, it's a girl(!). bad guys come to take girl, kidnap sister, destroy village. Heroes go to Big City, meet grumpy soldier, grumpy soldier agrees to help because girl looks like dead daughter (he killed her, like Hercules, went bersek... though, with the Chris Benoit thing, maybe I should leave that tidbit out...). second boss attacks Big City, plays Hero in game of tarot-like cards (it makes sense in the story, each bad guy has a quirk, his is gambling and drugs) in the middle of a battle. interspersed throughout are parts from the secondary villain's point of view, wondering why he's taking orders and generally stockholming up the main character's sister.
The main point of the story is that the girl who fell from the sky is more or less a clone of the fantasy world's version of Eve, and the first villain is the clone of Adam, and they're the keys to opening the gate to the garden of Eden. The bad guy's want to get to Eden to rewrite history because they all come from crappy lives and want heaven on earth. that's where most of the cliche comes in... and I can't seem to think of any better thing for the bad guys to want to do... at least it's rewriting history at the cost of millions of lives and not taking over the world though... it also turns out that the people who where behind the creation of the clones is another group of exiled Gods who want to get back into heaven and cause a general ruckus for having been left behind after one a Theomachy
And I need a plot guide, structure, thingy, something where I can get the skeleton of plot and hang the skin on it. I tried the snowflake Method, it was bleh. But this isn't a necessity, just a wish
The story in a nutshell (hey, get my story out of that nutshell!): a guy lives with his sick sister, something falls from the sky, he checks it out, it's a girl(!). bad guys come to take girl, kidnap sister, destroy village. Heroes go to Big City, meet grumpy soldier, grumpy soldier agrees to help because girl looks like dead daughter (he killed her, like Hercules, went bersek... though, with the Chris Benoit thing, maybe I should leave that tidbit out...). second boss attacks Big City, plays Hero in game of tarot-like cards (it makes sense in the story, each bad guy has a quirk, his is gambling and drugs) in the middle of a battle. interspersed throughout are parts from the secondary villain's point of view, wondering why he's taking orders and generally stockholming up the main character's sister.
The main point of the story is that the girl who fell from the sky is more or less a clone of the fantasy world's version of Eve, and the first villain is the clone of Adam, and they're the keys to opening the gate to the garden of Eden. The bad guy's want to get to Eden to rewrite history because they all come from crappy lives and want heaven on earth. that's where most of the cliche comes in... and I can't seem to think of any better thing for the bad guys to want to do... at least it's rewriting history at the cost of millions of lives and not taking over the world though... it also turns out that the people who where behind the creation of the clones is another group of exiled Gods who want to get back into heaven and cause a general ruckus for having been left behind after one a Theomachy
And I need a plot guide, structure, thingy, something where I can get the skeleton of plot and hang the skin on it. I tried the snowflake Method, it was bleh. But this isn't a necessity, just a wish