I was inspired to write this after watching Pirates of the Caribbean: At World's End.

I am sure it isn't formatted correctly. Can someone give it proper punctuation and format? Thanks


bathed in blue , the oceans hue , of salt and brine , ten years in time , a decade at last , on the dutchmen has passed , sail home today , sail home at last , a lover waits , with chest in hand , to free you from your task at last.

I'd recommend dispensing with the the commas, make each line a separate, um, line. If it's meant to be more than one verse, then put an aextra blank line between verses.

In poetry, where to put the line breaks is an important decision for the poet.

Nice work though, thats a piece of poetry I actually like :D (and I'm not much into poetry)

bathed in blue,
the oceans hue,
of salt and brine,
ten years in time,
a decade at last,
on the dutchmen has passed,
sail home today,
sail home at last,
a lover waits,
with chest in hand,
to free you from your task at last.

that's the proper format for a poem, but why couldn't you have done that yourself?... that said, it needs work to work well... would be better arranged like this:

bathed in blue
the oceans hue
of salt and brine
ten years in time

a decade at last
on the dutchmen has passed
sail home today
sail home at last

a lover waits
with chest in hand
to free you from your task at last

and better still, with no repeated rhyme words and attention paid to sense, line length and meter, perhaps like this:


brilliant blue
the ocean's hue
is art sublime
throughout all time

ten years at sea
the dutchmen free
their trials passed
sail home at last

[i've no clue what you meant by the last part, so can suggest no way to make it make sense... as is, it doesn't, nor does it match the rest of the poem in structure... and it repeats the same rhyme word again, which doesn't work well]
a lover waits
with chest in hand
to free you from your task at last

hope this helps... but next time, i suggest you work on your piece more on your own, before posting, and not ask others to do the basic work for you... it's easy enough to look at good poetry on the web, to see what makes a poem work and how to structure one...

love and hugs, maia