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sadness
04-24-2008, 03:16 PM
hi every one
I'm new guy her
I had wrote paragraph about Importance of English
I need someone edit my paragraph plz.:redface:
thank you friends

sadness

No one denies the importance of English language in the present time as global language. It is clear that the English language has become more dominant around the world. In some countries it use as the mother tongue and ,other countries learn it as second language in their schools. This is make English widespread. In addition, many reasons which contributed to rising of English spreading . for example, use it for communication between people around the world, as well as, it is language of modern times. On other hand , English is the language of science and technology.

There is no doubt that, the English is language of communication between the people with different cultures . It is also the language of computers that help to communicate with the people around the world through Internet technology and e-mail. People who know English can deal with the Internet, which is regard information and communications revolution .

Also one of reasons that contributed to the spread of English that, it is the language of the modern era. Where the people are use it in various field of life such as, economy, e-commerce, medicine and aviation. In addition ,it is the language which use in the tourism and travel. This reasons motive the people to learn English .

One of the main reasons why the English is dominant in the present time, use it in the field of education by universities and institutes and, they use it in scientific research . It has become an addendum to the mastery of scientific individual stock. On the other hand, the English is an important requirement in most government jobs and private.

It is quite clear that English has become an necessity today. We need it in different fields of life . The English language has become easier to learn more than ever before with the availability of many sources to help people learn very easily. Such as the Internet, books and educational institutes which spread around the world.

mammamaia
04-24-2008, 04:24 PM
welcome to the forum!... first of all, it's expected that new members introduce themselves in the section for that purpose, before posting/asking for help...

that said, it's clear english is not your first language and your paragraphs [there is more than one, so plural is needed there] need much more than mere 'editing'... they need a fairly significant rewrite, as well as having all the mistakes in grammar, syntax, punctuation, et all, corrected....

it's too much to do in a post, but i'm constantly working with writers all over the world, who need help writing in english, so will be glad to give this a good going-over, if you send it to me by email... i'll include reasons why what you write is not correct and show you how to correct your major problems in future writings...

here's just a sample of what this needs:

This is make English widespread.[makes no sense... should be, 'causes English to be widespread'] In addition, many reasons which [incorrect word choice and wording...change to 'other factors']contributed to rising of English spreading .[redundant and makes no sense... change to 'the spread of English.' and period must be right next to final word in sentence, with no space in front of it] For example, use it [should be, 'it is used'] for communication between people around the world, as well as, it is [makes no sense... delete... should be something like, 'having become the global'] language of modern times.

as you can see, that's a lot more than an ordinary 'edit'... let me know if you'd like me to help you with the rest...

love and hugs, maia
maia3maia@hotmail.com

sadness
04-24-2008, 05:20 PM
hi maia I'm sadness from saudia arabia
first of all , really, I Appreciate your help
yes I need your help plz correct the paragraph :redface:

Cogito
04-24-2008, 05:30 PM
As mammamaia indicated, you should introduce yourself in the New Member Introductions. That isn't a requirement, but if you did, as recommended by the notice you were given when you created your account, you would have received information of the use of the site.

What IS required of all members is that they read and follow the forum rules (http://www.writingforums.org/showthread.php?p=101625#post101625). One of those rules is that all material posted for review be posted in the Review Room forums, after meeting the posting requirements for that area of the site.

We don't rewrite your work for you. However, you may receive suggestions, such as mammamaia provided, so you can correct your own work.

Also, we will not do your homework assignments for you.

I'm closing this thread. Please follow the posting rules for the site from here on.