A Homeless Shelter

By mrsquishy · May 30, 2012 · ·
  1. He no longer needs the future or the past,

    like a sinking ship no longer needs its mast.


    His poor room had put up with men like him before,

    empty bottles on its table and a noose on it's door,


    he was alone and marginalised, an imperfect design

    limping out of contention in a lifelong climb.


    we'll comfortably blame the booze for his death,

    and he will perhaps blame us with his final breath.



    but before that room he'd already died in lieu,

    haunting the streets and begging for money from you


    At Forbes shelter they seem to get a lot of these,

    falling apples kept out of sight from the trees.


    A fall from the bottom never ceases flight,

    a descent from the plateua of something,

    to the ether of nothing.

Comments

  1. Radrook
    Very nice poem. Did you consider "ether of night?" as a viable ending?
  2. mrsquishy
    That's a great idea, I just left it out of any scheme with 'nothing' because I couldn't think of anything better but I think night not only does 'night' brings some schemata back to it; it also encompasses the nothingness i'm trying to convey (its also a fuller metaphor of the intention behind the poem). Thanks for the Radrook!
  3. mrsquishy
    that Radrook*
  4. mrsquishy
    sorry, that whole sentence was wrought with errors, it's late in England!
  5. maidahl
    "...limping out of contention in a lifelong climb" is great! I love it! Your last two lines lose me. What is a "plateau of something"? And besides, ether is already "nothing." It seems like you are using "nothing" just to clunk up a rhyme scheme.
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