An idea that I could get hate for...

By ChaosReigns · Jul 21, 2016 · ·
  1. You see, I rarely like to make a fuss, especially with my writing, because it normally doesn't have any tones subversion. but I find myself in a dilemma, with this idea that i've spoke about a bit on here.

    The title is Harvest: The Devil's orchard and the general premise is that it's about a group of demons, called the Oculus in Infernum, who are planning an attack on the gods, headed up by what effectively is the ruling male line.

    Lucifer is the head, effectively the devil himself, with Oriax and Zai (whose full name is Zagan) being son and grandson respectively, helping face up this attack.

    You see thing thing is, I love this idea, but I feel that if I share it once completed (which I want to do so badly) I will regret making that decision, as I feel there will be people who take what i've done totally the wrong way and not as the creative piece that takes a look at the idea of "what if it's actually the bad guys who are right" and how i've taken the portrayal.

    I will share an excerpt (the first three paragraphs) from what i've written up thus far below.

    Zai walked through the Orchard, masses of gravestones laid on the ground, making the Orchard a conflicting scene, much like his thoughts. "This is tradition," he whispered to himself, thinking of his ancestors. Three years after their deaths, their bodies were exhumed and moved to this place, the Devil’s Orchard. He looked round the orchard; the blackened bark was a stark contrast to the brightness of the day, the green leaves, and the blood-red apples that hung from the trees.


    The wind that whispered through the trees left voices of his past in his ears, his heritage coming alive within the realms of his own psyche. His life was one he crashed into, and one he suspected that he would equally crash out of in the most inelegant of ways. “This is all just a dream” he tries to tell himself, knowing that really it was not. Reaching his hand up to his head, he felt the familiar hardness of his horns curling over his head, hair following their curve to a curl at the base of his neck.


    “Still reality Zai, pull yourself together.” He commented, walking to the nearest tree and scaling it swiftly. He sat near the top, plucking one of the apples and eating it. the green leaves filtered the sunlight as he notices the mark of his group, the Oculus, darkening. Sighing, knowing that his leader, Lucifer was in need of him, he climbed back down the tree and walks quickly to his cabin. Seeing the darkness of the mark, he knew that it was serious and full robes were required.

    Thank you for reading, i've yet to completely write this entire idea and intend to do so, and I will see from there.
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Comments

  1. obsidian_cicatrix
    Ach... I wouldn't even give the thought head space. You know already that some folks aren't gonna be down with it. Nothing you can do to change that. Personally, if that's what I wanted to write, I'd write it. There are also gonna be folks who like the traditional turned on its head.

    My favourite portrayal of Lucifer was in The Warhound and the Worlds Pain, by Michael Moorcroft. He painted him as an entity far removed from 'devil with pitchfork'— incredibly alluring, almost sirenesque, simultaneously substantial and ethereal. At least, that's impression I got from the all too brief introductory paragraph. I almost felt like he was compelling me to read on, and appreciated what a tempter he might make if I believed in that kind of thing. His earthly domain was the only place of beauty in the entirely war ravaged setting. In fact, the protagonist stumbles into it straight off the battlefield.

    I came to find out that, like many a son who fall out with their father, Lucifer was regretful. All he really wanted was to prove himself worthy of his place, and so set in motion a plan to find a cure for the worlds pain.

    How very human.

    And not remotely evil.

    I can only assume that no one in Westboro Baptist Church read it, otherwise it would have been like The Satanic Verses all over again. ;)
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  2. ChaosReigns
    @obsidian_cicatrix i might send you over a copy of what's been written thus far via email, I really like this concept, and that's kinda rare (the only other one i like is my series really)
  3. obsidian_cicatrix
    No worries... send it to my primary email. I'll be in all day today, and don't have plans (that I know of yet) for the weekend, other than painting ceilings, so it'll be a welcome diversion. ;)
  4. ChaosReigns
    @obsidian_cicatrix i'll send this evening when i've got to a clean break in it, shouldnt take me too long to do (well, i've been trying to limit myself as this is a semi-rewrite while i'm still penning the idea in the notebook)
  5. obsidian_cicatrix
    No worries... I'm currently trying to figure out what to do regarding a leak in my kitchen ceiling. It started yesterday, but I thought the tennant upstairs had accidentally overfilled his sink. Now I'm starting to think there is a slow leak in one of his pipes. I've knocked the door but nobody's home. I'm starting to see the way the water is running, now that it's building up. A leak in one of his boiler pipes, judging by the position. I guess I'll have to get out a plumber as the water is getting rather too close to the double plug socket for comfort, not to mention my baking cupboard where I keep all my dry goods. I don't have access to the utility shaft to plug it myself, so there's a chance I may have to kill power very shortly, but I'll check for your email as soon as I get it sorted.
  6. ChaosReigns
    Ok, good luck getting it fixed
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