But, but....however?

By Midnight_Adventurer · May 4, 2011 · 409 · 2
  1. Yesterday I had the luxury of being able to sit down and transcribe a few rough pages of my novel onto my computer. Everything was going fine...until I decided to look over a few earlier pages. As I did I noticed one word that kept jumping up and slapping me in the face, but. It was everywhere! In the narrative, and in the dialogue! A quick word count put the total at 126 buts in 18,657 words.
    I'm still in the 'completing the first draft' stage of my novel, but (ahhh! there it is!) this is a problem that I fear is growing. Sure there are alternative words like however and although, but (grrrr) they're only masking the issue. I either need to do A LOT of rewriting or come up with an effective way of eliminating this pesky, little word.

    I know focusing on the issue isn't going to get my novel done, so i'll put it behind me, grab some lunch and then get back to work!

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  1. Gee-zus
    good luck with the writing. and don't let one word get in the way. i'm sure a lot of people think like that. it's good that you noticed this too. as it will help you to become a great writer.

    can i ask what your book about?
    Gee-zus, May 4, 2011
  2. Midnight_Adventurer
    Thanx Gee-zuz, :)

    I'm trying not to let it bug me, but (damn it!) since I've noticed it I can't help it ya know? It's like noticing a friends annoying habit for the first time and then not being able to ignore it.

    What is my book about? Good question! I'll let you know when I know, lol. Nah, seriously though I'm still working out the finer details but this is what I have.

    It’s about a girl, Lorelie (Lorie) who’s travelled the world with her workaholic mother. They’re currently living in London and Lorie's in her last year of High School. They’ve never seen eye to eye and because of their erratic lifestyle Lorie’s never really had any friends, her social skills are underdeveloped. Struggling to find her place and be who she wants to be, Lorie meets Theodore (Theo)—a quiet, calm and helpful young man. He gives her some advice and comforts her after she has a fight with her mother. Soon a friendship begins to emerge and Lorie sees Theo, and his lifestyle, as a sanctuary. A place of stability and comfort which she’s lacked. But there’s only one problem, Theo has a secret. He, along with a small group for friends, can access an astral plain in which a mirror reality of our world exists and in it our subconscious mind mimics our real self. Once you become self-aware of this you can enter a state of deep sleep, via a special drug, and take control of your subconscious mimic, allowing you the freedom to do whatever you want with no rules or consequences. This drug is very rare and known only to a select few, which is why someone’s willing to kill for.

    Yeah that’s all I’ve got, obviously there are some things to work out. The working title is ZONERS and I’m aiming it at a teenage/ young adult readership and it’s told from Lorie’s P.O.V. I’m kind of worried though because (I’ve already mentioned this in a blog post) I don’t want to sound like I’m taking elements from the movie Inception, even though I thought of my idea long before I knew what Inception was. The idea sounds silly when I tell it like I have so I’m hoping in story form it’ll sound much better. What do you think? :redface:
    Midnight_Adventurer, May 5, 2011
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