Eternity May 23, 2010
I literally sat there stunned after reading that.

Wow. It was so beautiful. So tragic.

The only thing I would change is one point where you're talking about the accident. You say "A drunk driver swerved, there was no time to react. I swear there was no time! Please believe me." I think I'd take out the last two sentences, and just say, "A drunk driver swerved. There was no time to react." The rest sounds like you're trying to defend yourself, you see, it sounds a bit like you're whining, trying to cover the mistake of that day.

But, goodness gracious, that's only my opinion, and that's only the smallest thing that I'd change. Everything else is really good. Amazing, amazing story. :p Keep writing!!