This has been freshly rejected by Heron's Nest...ah...but I loved it
morning smoke
another grandpa
spins a yarn
I tried the unconventional 3-5-3 style. But I guess the main problem is that the first line is somewhat vague. What do I mean by morning smoke? I am referring to tobacco smoke, but that should be more clear, for the main beauty of haiku is clarity.
Comments
Sort Comments By