I'd chuckle and keep reading, so if it's written well, go for it.
Cheers guys, that's plenty to go by for now, thanks for everyone's help.
Winston* from 1984 is one of my favourites too ;) Easy to get the author and characters mixed up. I always did like Othello, and found that a...
I am developing characters at the moment, and as part of this process I ask twenty questions to each character. I would like some suggestions on...
Try reading George Orwell's Politics and the English Language for ways to avoid bad similies. Similies should be in tune with the tone of the...
Interview them. (in your mind) I've recently started doing this, but it helps develop characters.
I've seen more than one published book 'trail in' a thought using an ellipsis, Tom McCarthy's Men In Space being the most recent example I have...
I'd give it a read, it seems kind of interesting to me. It's clearly a one-off experiment, I don't see any harm in trying to be a bit different.
a) Anaphora. It's a fundamental law of grammar that you will have to use in this situation, and others like it. b) Just mix it up, pronouns...
Same here. I started writing again after three years of not really doing anything after I read 1984.
Separate names with a comma.