Thanks for everyone's reply, by the way. I really appreciate the thought you all put into your answers!
Halcyon, thanks so much. I'm using that turn of phrase to flesh out my dialog - you hit the nail on the head.
Hi guys - quick question about phrasing. Which sounds more powerful? - Mark looked up and grinned at Polly. - Mark looked up, grinning...
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