although i cant speak for all the men in the world personally i would not have said Hayden Christensen maybe its because he hasn't been in...
if you want here to be a mercenary but still weir dresses then would she not need to find other ways of killing and fighting like drugging men or...
i think its very important not to stop your story or dialog in order to list your characters physical attributes you wouldn't do this with there...
i think your character is well thought out but has the potential to be over the top if not grounded well. perhaps rather than have her laugh her...
i think it would be interesting to have someone rich, powerful and opportunistic from the Jaanoaikken side double dealing under the table...
i agree that no one wants to read from the perspective of thick person for to long if you can see something before they can its not as fun when...
personal i don't mind switching, i think it can work really well but only if the charicter is as likable and interesting as your main one....
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