I think it's a perfect amount of description. You need enough to accurately picture the scene, and I definitely can from this.
Music swirled around my deafened ears. Colours pranced before my deadened eyes. Missing out on life's whole essence.
So many words, so little time.
Do I keep tackling it (or at least, try to tackle it) if it doesn't seem to be working out? I definitely have taken breaks from my story, though...
I have been told that if you're stuck at some point, or you're having trouble with your story, just start writing sheer nonsense in hopes that it...
Disaster
So, you don't want him to die. You also don't want him to become good. Well, then, from a perspective, think about him being like the...
One gunshot; two gunshots; knocked out.
Oh, all right, I'll try it: The burgundy bodice was far too tight, but despite my wincing and complaints, mother would not loosen it. Fear danced...
Wow, those are great! I might need to steal one or two... :)
The combination was far too simple.
I have the same exact issue, and my advice would be to simply write down the idea you have just come up with and dedicate a page to it and to fill...
"Well, that's not that bad," Elizabeth Athena says superficially, but it only takes about a second for the actual news to choke her up. A breath...
Separate names with a comma.