Thanks for the reply, everyone. Lots of great points being raised so far. The author who makes me think of this most is Theresa Monsour. Her books...
First, allow me to say that I love reading books, so this might not be a problem at all. Still, sometimes I find the interactive nature of video...
Good writers should avoid fluff in their writing. For example, nobody wants to read: Dominic nodded vigorously as he humbly accepted the most...
We all know jumping back and forth in time throughout a story can disorient the reader. Now, let's consider this paragraph: Michael watched as...
Everyone's been giving great advice. Oh, is it okay to delete "had" here? The guard performed that action in the past, so I thought including...
The only issue I might have is that the name is not specific enough. As in, when I read it, I might go, "which society"? But it beats trying too...
That's a good point. I've considered the same thing when writing the previous post. If the writer chooses to skip the country's details, dare I...
I find a world comes to life when its inhabitants have different thoughts. For example, instead of making a particularly race all agree on war,...
Last year, I made a trip to Japan. Not that I'm writing a story based in Japan or anything, but let's suppose that I was. Before going in person,...
I've loved other authors' characters to this extent, but never really for my own cast. With my characters, I've seen them evolve and become...
Everyone has been giving out great points. I would also suggest picking unique points in particular to describe. For example, mentioning a...
As suggested by several others above, giving her a soft spot might be a good approach.
Separate names with a comma.