I understand that. There's parts in there that are actually fixed from her suggestions, but these are things I feel need a second opinion.
So, my mom says this flows poorly, I beg to differ. Since she's not a writer, and gave me some very..... poorly structured suggestions... I've...
Breathe?
In this particular story, I'm trying to go slow and smooth. Basically, a girl has been depressed over her grandmother's death for two years (what...
This particular story is a slice-of-life with a pinch of fantasy. First time writing something other than pure fantasy. And just a little side...
That's a very wise and insightful point, thank you for that. I hadn't considered that view.
I've always ever settled for a cliffhanger to end my chapters, but I wonder if I'm overdoing it. Example: Chapter 1 ends with She approached the...
How about this: Bastet wakes up to find Isis (the goddess) standing over her. Isis explains that in order to preserve her existance, Brahma, the...
So I'm working on a sub-story to another book I'm working on, in hopes this mostly pre-planned story will give me ideas for the main book (this...
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