That is excellent advice, thank you. I knew that the speeches weren't working, which is why I asked how to change things. Your post is very...
Each of you makes a good point. It will be more interesting for the reader if I include action. More memorable as well. I think I will change...
I agree that training generally doesn't need to be written about in great detail. What little of it I plan to include is relevant though. The...
Yeah, you're right. That's another reason I didn't post a bigger excerpt. Didn't want to break the rules. Need to increase my post count and do my...
You are definitely right. I need to break it up more. I unfortunately have several spots where this happens. The excerpt above has more dialogue...
Ok, please be gentle. This is only my first draft, and this is fresh and unedited. I only just wrote it last night. This is one of several...
Hmm, I'm not sure. I will pick out an example.
Ok, so I'm writing a fantasy/scifi novel where my main character goes into training and other characters explain things to her. She has a lot of...
I hope I can successfully combine the two :)
Honestly, just about anything can spark creativity in me and give me ideas. Mainly it comes from reading, watching TV or movies or listening to...
Thanks for the welcome! Hoping to fit in, make some friends on here
Hello all. I'm looking for someone to chat about writing with, bounce ideas off of, and just be friends with in general. I am hoping for someone...
Thanks for the welcome and the advice! :D
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