This is what I was talking about. The dialogue tag. It seems to make your writing seem amateurish with the adverbs in them.
I've read that adverbs make writing seem weak and childish. I can see that with all the "ly" words. However, I've read that adjectives do the same...
yeah foreword
Does the author himself ever write a foreword? or is it always someone else?
Same here, dull character
Separate names with a comma.