yeah, it wasn't supposed to be pretty. I was just trying to show the simplest example I could think of that held true to the original. I really...
I think you noticed this, but that is a very wordy phrase. I am no authority, but here are my thoughts. "omnipresent refractive aura" Is a bad...
There are other ways to phrase that. Allow me to offer alternatives. He catches my eye and smiles at me, but even he looks nervous. He catches...
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