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    Alstroemeria's Writing Journal

    Discussion in 'Progress Journals' started by Alstroemeria, Dec 14, 2015.

    Hello. This is a place for myself to post updates on how my writing's going.

    I'm working on a poem tonight, loosely based on a prose piece which I'd written last month. I am stuck for whether or not to put an exclamation mark after the first word of the final line. I fear it makes it a little overwrought, and a little old-fashioned.

    This is the first serious writing I've done in months, incidentally!
     
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    I dropped the exclamation mark.
    I'm now cogitating and ruminating as to whether I should drop the phrase "lapsarian temperament" out of this poem. I think I will, and continue the original sin/Eden theme in a different way.
     
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    I'm really proud of the second stanza of the poem I'm working on.
     
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    I liken myself to both Eve and to Christ in this poem - and got banned from another writing place for saying so! Metaphor, context.
     
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    In other news, I think that the poem is pretty much finished. I took out one awkward line, and, now, it's done. I showed it to some people face-to-face, and they liked it.
     
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    I'm leaving hospital today. (I was in for an epileptic issue.)

    I'm waiting desperately for the 18th - payday! Until then, I have £1 in the world. I think that I will read Orwell's "Keep the Aspidistra Flying" whilst I wait for the money. Its main character's complaints that you can't do anything without money resonate strongly with me at the moment! £1. Fucking £1. Christmas wiped me out. A couple of my payments bounced recently, as I'd not been checking my balance and had remembered it as being higher than it were.

    When the money comes in, £100 will go to my family for rent, etc., and I'll put half of the remainder into savings (I'm considering opening a building society savings account) - the rest shall go on the couple of Christmas presents I'm yet to get, and on books. I'd like a complete Lowell, if such a book exists, and a bilingual Rimbaud, if such a thing exists.
     
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    My father has agreed to lend me money so as that I can buy my last few Christmas presents in time for the last Royal Mail postage date. I may still have to courier a few of them if they don't arrive in time - I'll be ordering them all from the Internet - but at least I'm now secure in the knowledge that I won't miss anybody's presents. :)

    I've decided that "The Wakeful in Gethsemane" - my poem - isn't quite finished yet. I'll do some more work on it tonight. I want to keep it fairly short - it's currently three proper stanzas and one single line - but I want to experiment more with the Eve and Christ themes. Perhaps I'll cut the Eve parts and change it to more Christ metaphors - or would that be too heavyweight and grandiloquent? Advice appreciated and welcomed!
     
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    I've decided to leave "The Wakeful..." alone. It's decent enough as it is, or so I feel. I can't wait for my account to be old enough to post it in the Workshop.
     
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    I'm giving serious thought to the idea of submitting "Ths Wakeful..." to a poetry or literature magazine. I may be going a little manic!
     
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    I went ahead and submitted "The Wakeful in Gethsemane", and another poem, "The Red Shroud", to the Adroit Journal, an arts journal specialising in teenagers' work. I suspect my poems will be rejected in favour of some 13-year-old prodigy's work! :whistle: Still, I'm glad that I worked up the courage to submit work to a journal. I may send them some of my prose and artwork as well.
     
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    Apparently my submission is "in progress" - I assume that this means that somebody's reading and reviewing it already!
     
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    I was going to write more tonight, but my head is too foggy with the meds, so it's goodnight from me.
     
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    I barely slept. Fell to sleep at around 4 and was up by 6. Ah, well. I got some writing, etc. done.
     
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    Had three pieces declined by a journal.
     
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    I wrote another poem - "To the Drains I Empty" - Keats-inspired, of course, but the style is more what I'd call "Lowell if Lowell had written free verse". It references Keats, St. Jerome, Leo Sternbach, Shakespeare, Aristotle, and Greek mythology. Dearie me. I submitted it for the Hippocrates Prize for Poetry & Medicine, which I thought apt, as it's about lithium.
     
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    The prize allows editing until January, so I had the chance to cut out the needless Latin St. Jerome reference. It was awfully obscure, and the judges may simply have thought, "why is this girl writing in Latin?". However, I've realised in the cold light of morning that my first stanza has one more line than the others.
     

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