So I think I've gotten to a solid layout, minimizing on the unnecessary. Let me know what you think and please be harsh! This is a 2 part first novel unfortunately, but I like where it's headed. Be brutally honest here!! I have a different one I'm working on as a few friends told me to split the query and a few Saud keep 1 query for submitting the story, then mention the 2 part after and that each half has a story arc. Let me know what you think!. Twelve-year-old Ameir Brian Henson finally encounters his big brother Aidan, after he vanished three long years ago, but it's not the joyful reunion he's fantasized about. Instead, Ameir discovers Aidan is working for an infamous warlord who has abducted there mother and is now after Ameir. The warlord knows that Ameir possess an arcane power that can rival his own and stop his grand scheme of destroying the core planet's of the solar system. The warlord intends to use Ameir's mother and his brother, as leverage, to force him to surrender. Now with the entire solar system at stake; Ameir must make a dreadful choice: save his family or save billions of strangers. Ameir: Apothesis part 1, is a mid grade science fantasy story about Ameir, a creative boy with an incredible arcane power, who must make the dreadful choice between salvaging his beloved family or saving billions of strangers. Complete at a shade above 66,000 words, I believe Ameir will appeal to fans of both Marvel comics and star trek. Thank you in advance for your consideration.