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  1. victo

    victo Active Member

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    Are both sentences grammatically correct?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by victo, Jun 20, 2015.

    Are both sentences grammatically correct?

    He owned an industry with revenues of $20 million to $30 million a year.
    (Certainly better than: a $20 million- to $30 million-a-year industry, right?)


    He owned an industry with annual revenues of $20 million to $30 million.
    (Adding the words "a year" at the end of this sentence would be redundant, correct? And should the word "between" precede "$20 million to $30 million" in each sentence?)

    Thank you.
     
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  2. ChickenFreak

    ChickenFreak Contributing Member Contributor

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    I think they're both correct. But "industry" sounds wrong to me. Industry usually refers to all companies in a specific area, as in "the steel industry".
     
  3. No-Name Slob

    No-Name Slob Contributing Member Supporter Contributor

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    Is this fiction or non-fiction? And did he own a company or an entire industry? If you're making a point about monopoly, I'd add "entire" for emphasis.

    In fact, I'd probably just say:

    "He owned an entire industry, with revenues averaging 20-30 million dollars per year."
     
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  4. victo

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    Thank you both.
     

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