1. ScutterBug
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    Arrangement of Actions/Dialogue

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by ScutterBug, Nov 11, 2009.

    (Wahey, second post on here ;) I'm on a roll.)

    Just wondering if this sort of layout would be ok if you had a section of dialogue and actions together? (The bit in bold is the part I'm unsure of!)

    “You’re my problem.” She scowled.
    Nick smiled sweetly. “Tell me something I don’t know.”


    Is it ok to be set out like that, do you think?
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    I'm not a hundred percent sure I understand your question. But if you mean that you don't know if you can state what's in bold before the same character speaks, the answer is sure (the new paragraph is used to shift from one speaking character to another). As long as Nick's the one speaking the dialogue piece that follows in the same paragraph, I don't see anything wrong with it (other than getting rid of the bolding).

    If, however, it is she who says "Tell me something I don't know." then you'll need to indicate that with a new paragraph and clarify it, as well by doing something like this:

    "You're my problem." She scowled.

    Nick smiled sweetly.

    "Tell me something I don't know," she said before Nick had a chance to speak.
     
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    Thanks for that :)

    Yes it's him speaking the second time (theres not actually any bold in the text, i just didnt think i'd explained it very well!)

    Thanks x
     
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