Hi there. I would like some input that I feel can help develop the style of writing I am travelling towards. There is a particular effect and rhythm that I wish to hone in my writing which may conflict with editors, judges, or people who hold proper use of grammar at a higher standard than I am use to. It's a long journey, but I will share with you one conflict which needs synthesis. The conflict is when I want to elaborate a complex idea, in one sentence, with an effect of openness, with the use of repetition and alternation, with a feeling of graceful explanation by providing alternative perspectives that paint the idea with contrasting similarity. I've tried to illustrate this style in the previous sentence and I want to know if it is grammatically okay, and if it is not, what sort of punctuations I would need. I've used semi-colons, but they seem to be a bit confusing, and people don't seem to like them. I try to throw the dash in there from time to time -which I'm utterly grateful to have been shown- but feel it's effect is too scattered for those purposes. If that example doesn't convey my dilemma well enough, I have a sentence that a friend who proof read found the snytax difficult: When the bell sounds within you, and the eyelids that once glazed over the lucidity of that perceptive awareness which so keenly discerns the quintessence of truth, which so insatiably observes the nature of reality, shoots open with a boom as resounding as the creation of the stars, you must answer the call to exploration if you are to ever look at your own life with dignity. I've tried working with it and turned it into: When the bell sounds within you, and the eyelids that once glazed over the lucidity of that perceptive awareness which so keenly discerns the quintessence of truth and so insatiably observes the nature of reality, open with a boom as resoundingly as the creation of the stars, you must answer the call to exploration if you are to ever look at your own life with dignity. But I still sense that readers won't be able to follow the rhythm quite the way I am intending.