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Which poem best evokes the theme of Jealousy?

Poll closed Oct 5, 2013.
  1. "Waking Up" by Richard Olgata

    2 vote(s)
    33.3%
  2. "Hemispheres" by Darkkin

    4 vote(s)
    66.7%
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    Past Contest Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest #239, September #1 -- Jealousy (Not Envy) (WINNER ANNOUNCED)

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Richard Ogata, Aug 31, 2013.

    Waking Up
    You carried my bags for me on the day we met,
    only... I was a little scared by your approach
    until I let you in my little world, showing me I was blind.

    Arms and mind open, you readily embraced me:
    receiving my whole heart, my body and my soul.
    Enjoying the budding blossoms of our new love together, my blue eyes opening.

    Always you are kind to me, no matter what I do.
    Loving me when I am ugly and overwhelmed,
    loving me when I am not.

    Many times now, have you carried my bags for me.
    Inspecting their contents: my bread and cheese; my milk and eggs.
    Never noticing, until today, the young cashier that always checks us out.
    Eyes, moving over what is mine to see.
     
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    Following the footprints in the sand...
    Hemispheres

    Of the Left...
    Logic dictates, science states...
    Facts, cold and hard...
    There is a reason for this rhyme.
    Keeping tempo, marking time.


    Of the Right...
    Amorphous as a veiling mist...
    Teasing as a summer breeze...
    Architect of castles in sky...
    A lone burst of laughter, singing in the rain.
    A dream so clear, so bright the need akin to pain.


    With the Right, controlled by the Left...
    These dreams, words of worlds, so very far away...
    Are laid down in orderly lines,
    Harsh and straight and cold.
    Yet these words speak of things, stories to unfold.


    The Left, it screams...Logic states...
    The Right, it whispers...Listen, know...
    The facts are there in black and white.
    Still the Left, it wails...A banshee in the night.
    So afraid, so furious with the Right...


    For the Left with all its logic...
    Senses there is something about the Right...
    It is there in those fluid, drifting thoughts.
    A certain something not found in sterling facts.
    A simple ability, a treasure that it lacks...


    It is the passion ignited by a song...
    The comfort in a hug...
    The thrill of a deed well done...
    The ability to touch the sky...and never leave the ground.
    The tears in the laughter...a scream without a sound.


    Such is the power of the dream...
     
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    Voting is now open for Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest #239!
    Once more, I apologize for the inconsistent updates to the contest; between the technical problems and teaching at a new school this year, time has not been on my side. I think things are well under control now, and the contest should be running more smoothly from now on.

    So please, take a moment to read these poems about jealousy, and vote for the poem which best evokes the theme!
     
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    Congratulations to @Darkkin, who takes the top spot for another poetry contest with "Hemispheres"! I've updated the thread name to indicate as much, but please take a moment to read "Hemispheres", and soak in the sweet, sweet sorrow of Jealousy!
     
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