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Which poem best uses the theme of freezing?

Poll closed Nov 30, 2013.
  1. "A Promise" by L.T.

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  2. "Frozen Heart" by Darkkin

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  3. "Punishment Due" by ChaosReigns

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  4. "Ice is hanging off by my ears" by -oz

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  1. morepages
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    Contest Winner! Bi-Weekly(?) Poetry Contest #242: November #1, 2013 -- Freezing

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by morepages, Nov 2, 2013.

    Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest #242: November #1, 2013

    Freezing
    As November descends, temperatures are too. First frost was just a week ago here, and winter coats have been pulled out. My school's HVAC system has officially been turned from cooling to heating -- winter is here.
    In the spirit of the changing season, this week's contest is all about freezing -- metaphorical or otherwise.

    The winner on the 15th will be the poem which best uses the act or concept of freezing in a poem. Have fun!

    - morepages
     
  2. L.T.
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    A Promise

    A million knives pierce my skin,
    The water cold and unforgiving;
    The stars above convey to me,
    This is no place for the living.

    Greedy hands force me under,
    And I fight for one last breath;
    But should it matter, I realize,
    For without him I welcome death.

    I call out his name, one more time,
    When I surface from the deep;
    It’s his memory I will cling to,
    Before I yield to endless sleep.

    Like an answer to my prayers,
    He comes to rescue me;
    In my heart, I knew he would,
    My hero he’ll always be.

    He delivers me to safety,
    Though it’s certain death for him;
    His lips tremble from the cold,
    And his eyes are growing dim.

    He’s the future that I chose,
    Short of that just isn't fair;
    But he makes me take one last vow,
    For all he does is care.

    He insists I make this promise,
    And I endeavor to resist;
    But his plea is resolute,
    So finally I desist.

    So when he’s gone, I follow through,
    At least that much I owe;
    So I squeeze his hands one last time,
    And swear I’ll never let go.
     
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    Following the footprints in the sand...
    Frozen Heart

    Icy...
    Slim and gripping...
    Small hands,
    Around the bole of a yellow birch...
    The only thing keeping her from slipping...
    Down. Down. Down.
    To the hard, hard ground.

    Anguish...
    A hell bright fire...
    Burning...
    Fury. Betrayal.
    Emotions, a turmoil...
    Churning.

    Tears...
    Weakness and love...
    Bright and brimming...
    On thin ice...
    Her hope and heart...
    Flitting, skimming...

    Swallowing a cry...
    Skirts whirling...
    Tears tumbling...
    Defences shattered...
    Innocence crumbling.

    Aster, blue star of the Fall...
    Turned and fled.
    Feet whispering across the leaves.
    Carrying her from the sight...
    That had her heart...aching
    ...burning...breaking...

    A beloved boy,
    With cold, cold hands,
    And a heart so warm and bright.
    Jack, who had loved her...
    Almost from first sight.

    The ring upon her finger...
    Had his troth to her
    Bound in emotion and gold.
    Now all that goodness...
    Was shattering,
    As the winds of November grew cold.

    For there, beside the brook,
    Aster spied him.
    His head resting in the lap of another...
    She, Chrysanthemum, of bitter heart
    And golden hair.
    Daughter of Hecate, she of living art.

    Hoar frost bloomed, virga swirled...
    As Aster fled.
    Old Man Winter came bearing down.
    Knowing something had gone woefully wrong...
    Something drastic to have dimmed...
    Aster's glowing crown.

    For Old Man Winter knew...
    His boy...
    In his heart and in his head.
    Knew he was as true as day.
    So what had caused Aster to turn away?

    And then, he too, saw them...
    In the clear, fading light.
    Jack's silvery blonde curls, rumpled...
    His face,
    So lively, clever and bright.
    Death mask sombre.

    Something was amiss...
    Something,
    Aster, in her innocence, had not seen.
    There was trickery here,
    For all who knew Miss Mum...
    Pegged her as petty and mean.

    This daughter of Hecate,
    Was a harridan in the making.
    Her hatred of goodness,
    Of Aster's light...
    Had brave men quaking.

    Aster, exhaustion looming...
    Stumbled to a halt, chest aching...
    Twilight flared, stars blinking down.
    The Man in the Moon, he looked away
    A delicate crescent,
    Ringed in a frigid crown.

    Aster's fiery curls...
    The Maple Fire from her mother, taken...
    Faded, brightened.
    In the limned and muted light.
    Silver glowed, where fire once burned.
    Hoar frost shone, as autumn turned.

    The Snow Queen, that stately Dame, she came...
    Wending down the mountain...
    In her wake...
    The reindeer pranced, silver bells ringing.
    Betwixt the pines, straight for Aster, they did make.

    Bells ringing...
    Winter birds,
    To the skies
    Winging, singing...
    Aster, tears frozen trails on her cheek,
    Sinks to the ground, defeated and weak.

    Unable to rise...
    Hope shattering in her heart.
    Aster knows, she and the world she loved...
    From one another they are about to part.
    For broken and incomplete,
    Was the place where the sea and river meet.

    It was the crossroad of the fey.
    Of the immortals, the legends...
    Spoken of round the fires at end of day.
    Upon this crossroad, she wept, defeated.
    Knowing nothing of the deception,
    Wrought upon the one, her soul completed.

    Crossroads marked her resting place.
    The heart of her son...
    The Snow Queen swore by all her grace.
    Would not be sundered,
    As she looked upon Aster,
    With her delicate, tear stained face.

    Exhaustion took the shattered bride.
    Silvery curls billowed and danced.
    Around a face kissed by pain, stripped of pride.
    A heart, crazed but not splintered,
    Still thrummed...
    A flicker of hope lingered inside.

    A faceted jewel was Aster's heart...
    Perfect and fragile...
    The merest touch would render it to shattered art...
    The Snow Queen knew only one way to keep it whole.
    It was a path down which the weak dare not go.

    Reaching out with a hand...
    Slim and icy,
    As Aster's own...
    She breathed the words,
    Binding Aster's heart in ice...
    Would Jack be strong enough to pay the price?
     
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    Punishment Due

    On a cold and misty morning
    Freezing rays awake a dawn
    So cold, so bright.
    Frost lays on the ground,
    As I walk in a park that only I know
    The hills and dips slippy
    For I am the only one who knows
    Where time will lead

    For the most part of the day
    The frost does not ease,
    Wild dogs and feral cats appear
    Realising the chilled air, they do not stay
    Leaving me here in this barren wastelands.

    I know not how this frozen ice-land came to be
    Nor do I wish to find out,
    Because this frozen corner of paradise,
    Is the only one untouched by man

    I wonder if this place,
    This place is my heaven
    Or am I still on earth
    Because for me, this chilled earth
    Symbolises my unthawed heart
    The time that I spend alone,
    I have no one to worry about,
    No people to call me missing
    In a life that only I am concerned with
    It is truly disconcerting that I should be
    The only one here.

    Or is this a punishment due?
     
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    Ice is hanging off my ears
    My toes are looking blue
    This cold just really interferes
    With all I want to do

    I want to run around and scream
    And yell and talk and shout
    But all I do is stand and dream
    And maybe slightly pout

    Just let me back inside, oh please!
    I'd even pay a toll
    But all I do is stand and freeze;
    My tongue's stuck to this pole
     
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    Vote for the poem that best uses the theme of "freezing"! And stay warm, everybody!
     
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    Frozen Heart isn't on this thread...
     
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    Thanks for the heads-up! I missed it in the merge!
     
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    Just so people know, I liked them all. It was a difficult decision.
     
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    Looks like we have a 3-way tie! I'll give the community till Wednesday to declare a winner, otherwise y'all will have to share the glory!

    Sorry for not updating on-time, I've been quite sick. Hopefully we'll get this back in order! As an aside, I'm noticing really high view counts on these contests, but almost no submissions. If you're coming by to take a look, why not try to write and enter something? It's fun and good practice!
     
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    Okay, the time has come again to vote on a contest! It has taken almost a month to collect multiple entries, so please let me know if you'd rather have monthly contests?
     
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    Looks like we have a three-way tie! Congratulations @Darkkin, @ChaosReigns , and @-oz!
     
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