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Which poem best uses internal rhyme?

Poll closed May 9, 2014.
  1. "Winter's Heart" by Darkkin

    6 vote(s)
    31.6%
  2. "Love Hurts" by Lewdog

    4 vote(s)
    21.1%
  3. "Internal rhyme is a waste of time" by Sword

    4 vote(s)
    21.1%
  4. "A creek beneath the bed" by Gweedo

    5 vote(s)
    26.3%
  1. Darkkin
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    Past Contest Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest #243: November #2, 2013 -- Internal Rhyme

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Darkkin, Nov 28, 2013.

    Winter's Heart

    A bitter breeze, stark and chilling...bit into a heart once willing.

    A clammy hand, down a cheek did stroke, as with a violent start, he awoke.

    Shoving the hated hand away, he stood blinded by the bleeding day.

    Wrath contorted his angel's face, how his heart began to race.

    For here was Chrysanthemum,

    And where Aster's love had glowed,

    There was a void, aching and numb.


    Old Man Winter blowing hard, knew his son's heart was pierced by an icy shard.

    Hatred an emotion Jack had never known, had seized the throne.

    Rage burning brittle and bright, Jack took flight.

    Snow and virga billowed, roiled as the Jack's blood, heated and boiled.

    Glacial blue and deepest black,

    Cloaked his once bright form...

    Created his wings as scales shielded his back.


    And moments before, where a boy once stood, a monster loomed boding no good..

    Smoke from an inner fire coiled up from his nose, Jack was a beast, now talons to toes...

    Ice sheered out as he leapt high, wings and lungs aching as he chased the sky.

    Chrysanthemum, daughter of Hecate, cackled in glee as he flew away.

    Mischief wrought, Aster's heart broken...

    She disappeared into the night,

    Withered mums upon the ground, her parting token.
     
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    Love Hurts

    With brittle bones, the ragged man moans,
    Day and night...as he rocks in his chair.
    Nothing's right, as he curses his plight,
    Of a generation who disrespects the old.


    Things no longer the same, and the youth is to blame,

    For changes that have since ruined the world.
    Yet nothing can part, those he loves in his heart,
    For those are the ones he will always behold.
     
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    Internal rhyme is a waste of time.
    I don't know why I must go,
    along with these themes to please,
    others with words upon words.

    I can't keep playing around with what I'm saying,
    it was just a joke and my words, too soon, I spoke.
    I love this theme but hate how it seems.
    That didn't even make any sense; my thoughts just wont condense.
    I need to get some sleep 'cause I'm so tired I could just weep.
     
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    A creak beneath the bed or a shadow can be said
    To be a monster a ghoul to the unwitting fool
    Lights flicker and flash the mind exceeds its cache
    Life muscle quickening tummy sickening
    Sit up grasping quilt, courage starting to wilt
    Was it real; was it at all, mouth too dry to call

    Eyes peering, something nearing
    Through the gloom, is it doom?
    Trick of the light mind altering fright
    Neck hair off the chart; listen to the beat of your heart
    Silently still, senses alert, eyes squinting peering, ears twitching pert
    Senses all five prove that you’re still alive

    All you hold dear frozen by invisible fear
    Afraid of blinking, light chinking, minds unreasonable thinking
    The songs of the wind distant, urge to scream insistent
    On your skin beads of sweat is it safe to look yet?
    Teeth gritted tight it could be a long night
    Be bold; be brave, safe within your bed cave

    I am though quite prepared, so I should not be scared
    With faithful old teddy and torch full of ever ready
    Sleeps weight, eyelids close, starting to doze
    Can’t stop myself yawning, it will soon be the morning
    Gave myself quite a fright, good night, sleep tight

    ………don’t let the bed bugs bite.
     
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    It seems to take longer and longer to collect enough entries to vote on, or to receive votes. When you come to vote, please consider sending me a message suggesting what you think might increase interest. This is your contest, I'm just running it!
     
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    Just letting everyone know that this poll will close in less than 12 hours, so be sure to vote if you want to.
     
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    Haha. Yeah, it is. If there hadn't been a tie, I wouldn't have bothered with the poll.
     

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