Here's a section from a project I'm working on - tinkering with it ( I'm prone to fuss over each sentence! ) -particularly the burning hot sentence - Druis choked, water spewing out of his mouth. Burning hot from his lungs that kept expelling it. His head throbbed. His shoulders ached. He was wet and chill. Warm lips moved from his mouth but hovered near. Looking up, he glimpsed in the darkness, an eye of turquoise fire, as if belonging to Neptune himself. “Dumb shit.” the mouth growled. Drius closed his eyes, blotting out his rescuer. Cursing him. - Not sure if the Burning hot is too, cut off from water ( it's subject ) or if 'it' covers it. Any ideas? is this okay? * Not sure if I'm keeping the Neptune's eye reference either - it's a little purple.