I have a character who's nickname is "the Raven" His birth name was Alistair Varselle, but he later changed it to Alistair Corvis (Corvis means Raven) and is usually adressed simply as "Corvis" by other characters (except friends/family, who call him Alistair, or Al) One of the reasons behind the nickname is his habit of hanging back from fights, joining only when he feels it is needed, sometimes arriving a tad bit late, so that battle is drawing to a close. (The idea being that ravens can be seen feeding on corpses after large battles.) He only got the nickname after an attempted assassination attempt (in which he is given a few wounds, which I've yet to fully decide. One involves being given a vertical cut down the left side of his face, leaving him blind in that eye and the second is being stabbed in the gut with a sword or something similar) One thing for certain is that his throat was slashed open by the last assassin (after cutting down the first, and running the second through) he was nearly finished off but managed to cast a spell in time which killed the assassin. He survived only by burning shut the wound to his throat with a burning piece of wood from the fire. His throat was badly damaged from the incident, and his voice is cracked and hoarse, his breathing comes out in pained rasps, and he finds it difficult to raise his voice. Taking into account his previous habits, as well as his hoarse voice (which I'm thinking of describing as being like the harsh caw of a Raven) he starts to be called "the Raven" as means of an insult. He takes it on as his new name after forming his own faction, called the Black Watch (or something like that) and his personal guards are referred to as the "Raven's Guard". Later on his brother heals the wound to his throat, but the damage is not entirely reversable, and his voice is left with a faint rasp/croak/growl to it. So anyway, now I've said all that, back to my question. Do you think it's too "cheesy"? Is there anything in there that seems stupid etc.?