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    Chew on this

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by Keith Trimm, Feb 27, 2013.

    Melvin, using some sort of super human power, leaped on top of the woman, pulled up his shirt, opened his chest and devoured her head inside his rib cage. He leaned back leaving her headless torso lying on the dance floor draining blood onto the wood surface. Alicia gasped in horror watching Melvin’s chest chew the woman’s head and spit it back out.

    Is that believable?
     
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    No..
     
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    No. But hey, go for it!
     
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    What if I changed his name to Bob?
     
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    That might work. Most Bob's I know could do that.
     
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    What! His chest/ribs ate her head. That's the weirdest thing i've ever read. Thanks for posting, it made me laugh.
     
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    Totally unbelievable, no respecting head eating chest I know would ever spit it back out.
     
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    Hello again.
     
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    I just got done marathoning the first two seasons of The Walking Dead, so...

    Yeah, I'd buy that :p

    Also, Welcome back Kieth!
     
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    content removed by author
     
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    Seems like something straight out of The Thing. Worked there so why not.
     
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    I've read a similar scene recently. But it was described better and in more detail. And the head was never returned.
     
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    What am I hungry after reading this?
     
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    Well, it's believable if they're two loved-starved crazy kids--who might be in the praying mantis family.

    If it's from one of those "sword and sorcery" novels, be sure to call Raven Software and see if they want their 1990 game engine back...
     
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    Yep. Many teenagers do this nowadays.
     
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    I laughed so hard i almost cried.



    True.


    BTW The thing gave me nightmares when i watched it as a kid. It was the only movie besides Stephen King's "It" to affect me that much and you OP sir are reminding me of those.
     
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    Try reading 'It.' The novel proved far, far creepier then the movie. However, the one novel that scared the hell out of me was 'The Relic.' It left me looking over my shoulder as I lay in bed reading it. Of course, I'd suffered a major burn and was doped up on major pain medications at the time. Moral of the story: don't read a scary book while drugged...
     
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    I guess it's okay.
     
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    I was thinking that myself. The belly eats somesones hands doesnt it?
     
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    No. If we was on top of the woman, with his chest leaning on her head - which is what's implied - how did he manage to pull his shirt up? He's got his weight on it - and is probably using his hands to stay up there.
     
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    Depending on the setting anything is possible and therefore believable. After all, there is no spoon ;)
     
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    I'm gonna write a story where my characters can fly at super speed, yet are still able to talk to each other normally as if they were completely still. Is that believable?

    It is. ;) If it makes sense for the world of Melvin's man-eating chest to have a man-eating chest then go for it.
     
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    Was? What are you doing now?”
    “I work for a pharmaceutical company in hell, they spend all day trying to find cures for all the diseases I picked up being a ranch whore.”
    “And Melvin is one of your employees?”
    “Yes, he’s washes all my boils and weeping puss pockets.”
    “That is disgusting,” Jeff said.
    “Oh well, you have to pay the piper sometime I guess. I need him back, my festering ass sore is starting to bleed and I need some lotion put on it.”
    “Can’t you put your own lotion on it?”
    “I wouldn’t touch my festering ass sore with a ten foot pole, that’s his job.”
    “Have you ever heard of Karma?” Jeff asked.
    “Is that a song by Boy George?” Dixie replied.


    I am in love with my own imagination.
     
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    I did indeed read 'It a few years after i had seen the movie, if anything just in hope of making clowns less weird(or scary) than they had been. Surprisingly i didn't find it much more disturbing than the movie.
     
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    I just didn't find Tim Curry to be that scary in the role. He's better suited for comedy than drama.
     

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