Does this paragraph seem choppy? should I use something else other than punctation when I try to create dramatic pause? What is happening is other worldly by the way, to hint towards that the Grand Master has powers that the MC have not previously realised. Kind of like when Gandalf seem to grow and the room becomes darker when Biblo refuse to hand over the ring in the first book of the trilogy. "Come now, you cannot seriously believe thats the truth? You always taught me to…” Suddenly his words are stuck in his throat. The Grand Master red eyes turns darker. His eyes pierces through him. It hurts. It is difficult to breath. Hate. There is only hatred in his eyes. The pressure disappears when The Grand Master starts blinking and looks around, as if he was transported somewhere else, to another time, for just a moment. He looks at Fendrael again and finds fear in his eyes. “I am sorry…” he says, looking into the fire. A rare show of weakness that Fendrael has never seen before. “You know I would gladly talk with you on any matter, just not about them.