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    Cogito and Solar - Weekly Poetry Contest (194) Joint Winners

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    Lorelei
    By Cogito


    With a voice like blackest ocean depths
    she sings. Men stop to listen, drinks forgot
    enslaved, caught in the magic of her
    eyes, her hips, the summons of her lips

    A young man brash and full of pride, sees in her
    another toy. One more nightly woo and tumble and
    sayonara. Brazen hunter is ensnared and he
    believes she is the prey, charmed and won at closing time.

    She lets him lead her to his den. And then
    she is seduced, in truth seducer. Takes him in and all his
    soul. A lifeless husk she leaves behind. Morning brings
    a manager with shattered nerves, as approaching siren wails.

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    A Brown Jubilee
    By Solar


    POET

    I recognise you. You’re the friendly tiger.
    You captured man’s heart
    long before he made the plough
    or sounded the ram’s horn.
    Is there survival value
    in your retractable claws,
    in your pink tongue panting the sunshine,
    in the way you purr gold?


    POPPY

    Do not be alarmed. Really, honestly, I do not bite.
    I merely spin a yarn of worlds
    on easiness, so rocks become armchairs, plump, cushioned.
    Come, sit close so that my breath mingles with your brain.
    I’ll transform you. Hero. I can make you king
    promote you to god
    weave anything you want


    POET

    No thanks. I’ll be turning on my heel
    different ways, for I know a legend-teller who reckons
    your kind once ruled the Rooster island;
    you grew strong, sun-drunk, magical; sailors found you
    chanting tales of temptation unto doom
    you ate them, all the men – not like air –
    but like chocolate cake or brioche, or any other sweet-bread.
     
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    Good job guys.

    And it's nice to see more people voting this round.
     
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    Well done, both really deserved to finish top. Loved Cogito's especially, it flowed very nicely - lyrical, almost.
     
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    Thanks. I wanted to juxtapose both meanings of siren, and felt like playing with internal rhyme.

    Looking back at it, the siren in the poem has characteristics of a succubus, rather than a siren.
     
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