I took a look today at my old book and noticed something terrible. Some awful dialogue that I didn't notice until now, seemed awful and awkward. I have now preceded to the moment where I'm describing the start of the fight. It goes a little something like this. Andrew stands staring at Carol with his arms wide and a (blank) as she sits them on a nearby table and stomps up to Andrew. What I'm trying to describe here is that a girl is marching up to my character and about to knock his lights out and as she approaches him the man looks at her as if he's saying "Please you ain't going to do nuthin'", but I don't want to exactly say those words. I appreciate any help that I can get.