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    Dead on Arrival

    Discussion in 'New Member Introductions' started by Filth, May 22, 2008.

    He comes from the grave, his body a home of worms and filth. No life in his eyes, no warmth of his skin, no beating of his breast. His soul, as empty and dark as the night sky. He He laughs at the blade, spits at the arrow for they will not harm his flesh. For eternity, he will walk the earth, smelling the sweet blood of the living, feasting upon the bones of the damned. Beware, for he is the living dead.​

    -Obscure Hindu TEXT, CIRCA 1000 B.C.E.​

    A solitary grave with a tombstone so defiled and broken that nothing engraved in its surface is still legible. The moon hangs high in the ar illuminating the area that had once been a landfill, the area served as the final resting place for Phil L----. So much hatred was present for the deceased to have been buried in such a place and although the time had been taken to create a tombstone it was clearly destroyed intentionally.

    Thunder booms from overhead and lightening cracks down like a whip from on high as dark clouds of ill omen begins to gather over the field of buried trash and garbage. There comes a slight tremble of the earth on the ground begins to swell, soil shifting as something stirs beneath it. A low guttural sound like the growl of a wolf is heard and finally a hand emerges. The tips of its fingers rotted away exposing dirt stained bones. Another hand emerges and slowly the rest of the departed slowly begins to pull itself free of its shallow grave, for not even death can stop such a spirit and the earth cannot hold that which darkness controls.

    It takes but a few minutes for the re-animate corpse to pull itself free of the dirt and stand once again on its own two feet. He shakes his head back and forth, a large ‘fro’ of curled, matted black hair shakes a majority of the dirt and garbage free from its tangles. He shakes his slim but still muscular torso free of dirt as well before brushing himself off with hands that are barely more than dead skin stretched over bone.

    He wears a black shirt, emblazoned with an inverted white cross on its front with a pair of black loose fitting jeans, long faded and soiled with the dregs he had been buried with. Although he wears a black belt with a ‘Jolly Roger’ belt buckle, his jeans hang just low enough to be deemed inappropriate by the moral standards of any normal person. His shoes matching the previous color scheme is a simple pair of solid black Vans with white trim. Embedded into the center of his chest and heart is a large hunting knife, although it doesn’t seem to be of any importance or disruption the man.

    He coughs once; dirt and dead insects escape his mouth. The taste lingers on a dead tongue but as of the moment those are the least of his thoughts. His skin having been tanned in life is now a sickly decayed variation of its former tone. His teeth, jagged and stained yellow are exposed as his dark lips pull up in a rather wicked smile while the empty sockets that had once held his eyes stare off over the distance. He has risen as non-life, immotal as undeath.

    Filth has arrived.

    About the typist:
    Let’s see, as much as I love talking about myself I’ll try to keep this short.

    I’m from Phoenix, AZ but currently stationed in Norfolk, VA serving in the United States Navy onboard the USS George Washington (currently out in the middle of the ocean). For the most part any writing I did was for Role-play forums (hence the first bit of my introduction) which was a nice way to exercise my creativity creating worlds, characters and posting with others. Recently, I grew bored with it and decided that any writing I find myself doing would be for working towards re-writing a novel I wrote a long time ago. Something I’ve been telling myself I was going to do for the last four years.

    Thus is how I find myself here, hoping to get as much criticism of my works as possible, return the favor to others, get suggestions for what books to pick up neck and just make general conversation about writing etc.

    See you people around the boards.

    -Filth (PL), the coolest person I know.
    I believe there is some good in all people. Those are the parts I eat.
     
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    Welcome to the forums :)

    Just to let you know that on these forums we do things a little differently in our emphasis of reviewing as a critical skill. For each piece that you would like to be reviewed you should first review two other pieces of work in order to ensure that everyone isn't just posting work without making a contribution themselves.
     
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    Nice to see you here. I hope you enjoy the forums and I hope you enjoy your tour of duty.
     
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    Hello Filth...Welcome to the forums!
     
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    Hey there :) Welcome to WF.org.
     
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    Nice intro :) Welcome
     
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    Hi and welcome.
     
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    Hello Filth, Welcome to the Writing Forums.

    If you haven't explored the site yet, you should probably do so soon. Newcomers often gravitate to the Lounge, the Word Games, or the Review Room, but there is much more to be discovered if you poke in the corners. Remember to check out our FAQ as well, and be sure to read through the forum rules, too, to avoid any misunderstandings or hurt feelings. Respect for one another is our principal mandate.

    As for the Review Room, new joiners often wonder why we do things a bit differently on this site than on other writing sites. We emphasize reviewing as a critical writing skill. Training your eye by reviewing other people's work helps you improve your own writing even before you present it for others to see. Therefore, we ask members to review other people's writing before posting work of their own. The Review Room forums on this site, therefore, are true workshops, not just a bulletin board for displaying your work (and on that note, please only post each item for review in one Review Room forum). See this post, Why Write Reviews Before Posting My Work? for more information.

    Enjoy your stay here, and have fun!
     
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    hello and welcome to the forum. I hope you have a wonderful time with all of us.
     

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