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    Describe the sound one makes when shivering.

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by GoodTweetyBird, Aug 21, 2013.

    Can you tell me if you have seen in print a spelling for the sound one makes when experiencing a sudden deep chill? What I hear from my wife's utterance is
    "Uh-uh-ih-ih-uhh" but it doesn't look good in print. I have seen some forms of "Brrrr" but that seems more voluntary and I am thinking of an involuntary sound.

    We talked about sound effects in a recent thread where I think the point was well made that some sounds should just be described. Perhaps this is one.

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    She wrapped her arms around herself, her skin chilled from the unforgiving cold. The teeth in her mouth chattered together relentlessly and uncontrollably, and she couldn't stop herself from shaking.

    Not exactly the "sound made when shivering" but it does give the impression that she's shivering. Provided you were looking for shivering from cold and not shivering from fear. :D
     
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    More times then not in print, I mostly see people describing the chattering of teeth, or the quick but short and sharp sounds of a person breathing when shivering. They usually don't make a sound that I know of, but then again I may not have read a book yet where it's shown.
     
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    Frrrr

    Perhaps? The R should definitely be in there, if I try to fake shiver I notice that I am sucking in air as well...

    Of course, keep in mind that different languages have different ways of verbalizing certain sounds, just take a look at a comic book and you will see all kinds of sounds to be translated into different "sound effects"
     
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    Shivering is silent, you describe it as shivering or shaking (or teeth chattering as noted above). However, having a person stutter anything they are saying can show the reader shivering.
     
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    I'd say there just isn't a sound for shivering. Except maybe small rapid inhales, which don't really have any definable sound.
     
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    Simply, uhebrubrehbr.
     
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    Maybe it's because I've been drinking, but I fell out of my chair laughing when I read this. I even tried saying "uhebrubrehbr" aloud but failed miserably.

    To answer the OP, I think this is one of those times when simply saying that a character is shivering is better than trying to describe a sound for it.
     
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    I may have laughed harder than I should have. :rolleyes:
     
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    Well I've always understood it to be "brrrr", although that might just be UK usage.
     
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    Teeth chattering is the best, even if not always a literal description. Or maybe like ts-ts-tssss sound as we deeply inhale the chill through clenched teeth and start shivering.
     
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    spacial disturbance....
    folding callamity.....
    freezing tell tale sign
    autumn wind
    mind bent on waves
    short lived memory

    time erelevant

    ignorance

    spacial disturbance....

    .... lol bible favourite..... GNASHING TEETH ... rofl

    sorry just thinking to myself how it could be explained not actually written as a sound...

    you could always type it as a stutter .... s s s sorry i i'm c c c c cold
     
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    yes, this is one of those!
     
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    The OP is such an idiot at times, if he had only mentioned that it was not a cold chill, but rather a chill from panic, or fear, or physical reaction.

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    still not something one should attempt to reproduce as a written sound effect... the important aspect of such a situation is how the person is affected and reacts, not the barely distinguishable sound his/her breath makes as it's expelled...
     

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