I've been going over the few chapters I've written for my first novel and while I think I've gotten to a point where the plot and writing is good to continue on, I'm still reconsidering points about how one should "angle" their writing (there might be a proper term for this). I'm wondering, given the following example, should I continue with the former style, or try using the latter style more often. That is, for a sci-fi action/suspense novel, would a more personal or more cinematic point-of-view suit better? Current (this isn't the protagonist by the way): More personal point-of-view: I'm at the point where I think I should rework the point of view to be more from the character's point of view rather than from an third person point of view as in the first excerpt while still keeping all the details I want of the scene present. What do you think?