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    Do I need a pronoun here?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by inkyliddlefingers, Oct 23, 2012.

    The late morning sun warmed her face but hadn’t the strength to dispel the mood she was in.

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    The late morning sun warmed her face but (it) hadn’t the strength to dispel the mood she was in.
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    In critiquing my short story someone just inserted (she) where the (it) is inserted above. I didn't think it needed a pronoun at all as it was implied by the sentence structure.

    What is your advice? Does it need clarification? Is it possibly a British/US English difference? Only, I've offered this piece for critiquing at University and it has been graded by two professors, and no-one mentioned it before. But I want to enter the story into a competition and would liek it to be as good as possible.

    I'd be grateful for any reponse. Many thanks
    ILF
     
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    either way is ok, imo... as both an editor and a writing tutor, i wouldn't take issue with either one...

    'she' would make no sense, as it seems to me it's the sun lacking strength, not the person...

    however, i would suggest placing a comma before 'but'...
     
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    It certainly doesn't need the pronoun, and my personal preference would be to leave it out, but the sentence is still standard English if you put it in. I suspect your reader misunderstood the sentence and thought it was the woman who was lacking strength. Including the "it" would at least prevent that misreading.
     

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