Recently had a question about paragraphing on another critique site and someone was helpful enough to point out the main problem being that I'm giving readers facts without emotional support. Do you ever find yourself doing this? The paragraph in question is the below: My problem is (I think), that I think I'm giving the reader in-depth information on the character, but what my fellow critiquer says is I'm not inside his head. I'm still feeding the reader with facts of seeing, but not of the mind, not why he's being so paranoid. Does anyone else have any problems like this in their own writing? I wanted to kind of hide the fact that it's his ex-wife he's running from, but I believe that's the wrong direction to go; instead I need to feed the reader that information first. Anyone have suggestions as well, for spotting this kind of thing out?