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    Contest Winner! Flash Fiction Contest #32 - Well Done AdDlct!

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Flash Fiction Contest Archives' started by Lilly James Haro, May 4, 2016.

    Congratulations to the newest winner of the Flash Fiction Contest, @AdDlct who wrote the entry, ‘Welcome to Stalebrook’. Well Done! All the entries were fantastic and it was very close, congratulations to @HelloImRex as well who came second with the entry ‘Coconuts Are Stupid’. Thank you to all who read the entries and voted as well.




    @Wreybies, if you could please present the medal :)
     
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    Here is AdDlct's winning entry:

    "So where are you headed?"
    "Stalebrook."
    "The Island?"
    "Yeah."
    "Oh. Man, I wouldn't go there."
    "Why?"
    "Bad shit, man, bad shit. Like people dying bad shit."
    "That's nothing I haven't heard before."
    "Well if you say so man."
    ----

    "Hello."
    "Well hello, can I get you a drink?"
    "Oh I suppose."
    "What's your poison?"
    "A scotch on the rocks."
    "You got it."
    "Thank you."
    "No problem."
    "Mind if I ask where you're going?"
    "From a pretty lady like yourself? Not at all. I'm heading to Stalebrook."
    "Stalebrook?"
    "Yes, Stalebrook."
    "Oh, ma'am, you shouldn't go there."
    "Why?"
    "Bad things happen on Stalebrook Island. Bad things."
    "What type of things, you know besides dying. People die everyday. Unavoidable fact of life."
    "No one ever comes back from Stalebrook."
    "That's it?"
    "Yes."
    "Wow."
    "I know. Do not go to Stalebrook."
    "No. Wow, just like, you have that on your tourist pamphlet? Beware Stalebrook Island, you won't come back alive! Sounds like a trumped up horror attraction."
    "If you say so... Also this scotch is very good."

    ----

    "Hey! Hey! Wait up!"
    "Uh... yes?"
    "You're the chick looking to go to Stalebrook Island right? I think you were hitting on my sister in the bar last night?"
    "If your sister was the pretty blonde with a scotch in her hand then yeah. I was."
    "Okay well, you seem nice enough. So I just thought I'd pitch in my two cents."
    "About?"
    "Going to Stalebrook."
    "Oh god."
    "Seriously. Bad things happen in Stalebrook. Don't go."
    "Why the hell not?"
    "Stalebrook screws with your head."
    "If this is the part where you offer to come with me to save your fragile masculinity, I'm going to have to decline."
    "What?"
    "Everything else about this has seemed like a cliche movie, I'm just waiting on my doomed sidekick now."
    "Look, I'm just trying to help, no need to be a bitch about it."
    "Whatever man."

    ----

    "Ouch."
    "What's the matter?"
    "Nothing. Paper cut."
    "So, when are you going to Stalebrook Island?"
    "Huh?"
    "Stalebrook. You're the girl going right?"
    "How'd you know?"
    "Small town, word travels fast. Especially when the newcomer hits on the mayors daughter."
    "Well shit."
    "So when you heading out?"
    "Was thinking bout tomorrow. Got bout everything else settled."
    "That's good. Good."
    "That's it?"
    "Hmm?"
    "Not gonna warn me off about the dangers of Stalebrook?"
    "Nah, you're fucked either way by now I bet."
    "What?"

    ///

    "Bad shit, man, bad shit. Like people dying bad shit."
    "No one ever comes back from Stalebrook"
    "Stalebrook screws with your head."
    "Bad things happen on Stalebrook Island. Bad things."
    "Seriously. Bad things happen in Stalebrook. Don't go."

    ///

    "Figure it out?"
    "That knife looks sharp."

    "Welcome to Stalebrook."
     
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    Congratulations @AdDIct : great story. I voted for Coconuts Are Stupid, the title alone won me over
     
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    Great job @AdDIct!
     
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    Congratulations, AdDIct!!
     
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    Well done @AdDIct!

    I voted for @HelloImRex. I thought it was a quirkly little story.
     
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    Ah! Thank you all! I'm honestly kind of surprised lol. I wanted to try something a little different for this (ie a story based solely around dialogue and how much I could tell with just speech and nothing else), I'm glad that everyone enjoyed it though :D
     
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    I voted for your story, Her Island, though there were several I liked including, Welcome to Stalebrook, and @Fawky's, The Island of My Mind.
     
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    Aww thanks, I'm glad you liked it! :D There were a lot of good ones!
     
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