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    Help With A Title

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by Booker, Mar 14, 2011.

    I'm currently working on a novel aimed at girls aged 9-12 and I have two possible titles I'm trying to decide between.
    The book is about a girl who wants to dance but has a phobia about it. The two titles are:

    The Unlikely Dance of Jenny Spark
    Dancing on the Inside

    Any thoughts about which title would appeal best to this audience?
     
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    It depends what the book is about?
    Maybe the title that easy to remember, like the second one..
     
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    Just going by age range, I'd go with the second.
     
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    I always choose titles based on an important line, word, or phrase in the story itself. If you don't know if either title fits, just read through your book until you hit something that resonates with you and use that.
     
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    I think they are both a bit too old for 9-12 but I could be wrong - the first one is probably the more appealing of the two.
     
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    My kiddos are 6 and 8 and there are books in both reading ranges that could be titled like the second. The first would likely go over their heads, at the ages they are now.

    I'd be more concerned with the content of the book being readable for the age range chosen, myself. The title is usually explained well enough in the reading. Lemony Snicket books have wordy titles, but the kids find that silly, so the first *could* work alright if you are more drawn to it.

    But I'd still lean toward the second, personally.
     
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    I prefer the second too.
     
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    The second. I think it's a beautiful, yet simple way to define what you described.
     
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    I like it too... except I made the mistake of Googling the phrase, and got this...


    Dancing on the Inside
    The personal web log of a web site builder and designer.
    www.dancingontheinside.com/ - Cached - Similar
     
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    the second... the first is too wordy...

    it doesn't matter if it's in use elsewhere... titles can't be copyrighted...
     
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    I just asked my 8 year old. She said, "I'd go with number two." No hesitation.
     
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    Wow. Thanks for all the feedback. I had been leaning towards the first because I thought it was more fun and I see a lot of YA books with character names in the title. But the second does summarize the idea behind the book better.
     

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