Hi. I was wondering if I could get some assistance practicing 'Show, Don't Tell' in my writing. I understand the concept somewhat... The idea is to use descriptive passages rather than declarative statements to describe objects, characters, scenes, etc. But I'm having a little difficulty putting it into practice with my writing, and was wondering if I could get some assistance... For example: "John didn't want to get his groceries because it was raining outside." The above example is of a declarative statement, describing the weather in the simplest terms possible. 'Telling'. "Noticing the milk carton in his refrigerator was almost empty, John debated whether or not to go to make the trek to Safeway to resupply. He thought better of it when he gazed out of his window and saw an endless downpour of torrential rain, falling from the sky as if God had suddenly rescinded his promise to never again destroy the world of men with a flood." The second example is my attempt to 'show' the audience the rain that kept John from the grocery store rather than just simply tell the reader that it was raining. But more often than not when I attempt to put this into practice with my writing the descriptive paragraphs just don't sound right when I read them back to myself. I'd really like to clock some practice time with this, so I was wondering if anyone feeling charitable with their time could post some sample declarative statements that I could convert into "Show, don't tell" descriptive passages and maybe critique me on how I'm doing. I know everyone on this board is at least as busy as I am, but any help on this would be greatly appreciated.