[Edit: A revised and entire query letter has been posted below] Hey, everyone. So I am in the revision processes of my first novel and I am hoping to get some feedback to fix the synopsis of my query letter. I like how part of it comes off but some of it just doesn't feel right. I thought the views of more experienced writers may give me some guidance. I would appreciate any help you all could be in fine tuning it. **** In a post-apocalyptic landscape of androids and sorcerers, five people searching for their place stumble upon a world-saving adventure that will drag them through love, pain, and self discovery. Heroes of Terrestia is a completed fantasy adventure novel of 83,000 words. The once-fantastic world of Terrestia was filled with magic, technology, and natural wonders. A rift between dimensions filled the world with hoards of demons that destroyed nearly everything except a few remaining cities. The apocylyptic wasteland of Terrestia has enough problems, but another is on the rise. Everything short of destiny finds five people coming together: an adventurist gunslinging mage, a drunken dark elf thief, an orc ronin samurai, an android who seeks to unlock the power of ancient monks, and a runway tribal princess who shares a direct link to the deity of the undead. As these heroes fall together, they quickly become entangled with The Disciples of the After who seek to capture the tribal princess. Together, they fight a barbarian assassin, evade pirates, and outrun the cultists. What will the five go through to prove they have what it takes to save the world of Terrestia?