1. Spily

    Spily New Member

    Nov 19, 2010
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    Discussion in 'New Member Introductions' started by Spily, Nov 19, 2010.

    Hi, new to the forums, hoping to improve my writing of essays, and analysis of poem through help from others and helping others.

    Just had a quick question aswell, i'm having trouble determining the metre in Patricia Young's "Boys"

    Here are the first few lines

    Day-Glo idiots, hapless visionaries.
    Boys were boys, we weren't particular.
    Words bunched in their firsts,
    but what did we care? We wanted
    the lazy and fuzzy-cheeked, the ones
    who went ape-**** over girls who blew

    smoke in their faces and came with six-month

    Okay so i've been trying to find the metre through the seconds line

    I get a hard stress, soft stress, hard stress, soft stress, hard stress, soft, strong, soft, strong

    Could this be a trochee? Or are my stresses wrong?

    Thanks alot!
  2. Eunoia

    Eunoia Contributing Member Contributor

    Mar 8, 2010
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    Welcome. :)
    I'm afraid I have no idea about your question, but I'm sure others will. :p
  3. Cogito

    Cogito Former Mod, Retired Supporter Contributor

    May 19, 2007
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    Massachusetts, USA
    Hello Spily, Welcome to the Writing Forums.

    Please read How to Use the Review Room before you post there. Posting your own writing for people to comment on should not be among the very first things you do here. It is worth taking the time to see what other people have done to improve their writing, and see if some of it applies to your writing as well. That is part of why we require members to review other members' work before posting their own for review. On the other hand, there are no restrictions, other than content and copyright rules, on showcasing your work in your member blog.

    Also, be aware that posting a piece of writing on any public site, including this one, will greatly diminish your chances of selling it for publication. Removing the writing later does not alter that fact - once posted, it is irreversibly considered published. So do not post anything more than a small excerpt of any piece you are planning to submit for publication.

    If you haven't explored the site yet, you should probably do so soon. Newcomers often gravitate to the Lounge, the Word Games, or the Review Room, but there is much more to be discovered if you poke in the corners. Remember to check out our FAQ as well, and be sure to read through the forum rules, too, to avoid any misunderstandings or hurt feelings. Respect for one another is our principal mandate.

    As for the Review Room, new joiners often wonder why we do things a bit differently on this site than on other writing sites. We emphasize constructive critique as a vital writing skill. Training your eye by reviewing other people's work helps you improve your own writing even before you present it for others to see. Therefore, we ask members to review other people's writing before posting work of their own. The Review Room forums on this site, therefore, are true workshops, not just a bulletin board for displaying your work (and on that note, please only post each item for review in one Review Room forum). Also, please use the same thread for all revisions and additional excerpts from the same piece of writing. See this post, Why Write Reviews Before Posting My Work? for more information.

    And while you're looking around, don't forget to check out the RPG forum for improvisational fiction. Also try our Weekly Short Story Contest and Weekly Poetry Contest. They actually run more than one week apiece, but any member may enter, and all members are urged to vote for their favorites.

    Enjoy your stay here, and have fun!
  4. Gigi_GNR

    Gigi_GNR Guys, come on. WAFFLE-O. Contributor

    Jul 25, 2009
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    Milwaukee, WI

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