Hello, I'm writing a novel, and in this novel are many characters. I've been told, here and elsewhere, that my characters sort of have an inhuman quality about them. This is the reader's judgement based on the first 5 or 6 pages though, so I was wondering about the following things: Should I try to establish an early emotional connection to a couple of the characters in my novel? Or should I begin by devloping their physical features and speech patterns in the first pages, then move to an emotional level later on as the story progresses? Rather than throw everything about the character at the reader all at once. If yes to the first question, how could I effectively do this without throwing everything at the reader at once, or disrupting the flow of the story? In my dialogue, how can I make my characters' speech and thoughts more natural, and less inhuman, i.e. scripted? Here's an example of one characters thought process: “What is it in this man’s nature, which makes him so different to me? We are both the same age, and he is the youngest in his family too. It was certainly upbringing . . . spoiled! I struggled; it was all I knew for years. But he! No, would an easy life give a man confidence . . . why? He is confident, but stupid perhaps. Does he care about important things, or is popularity synonymous with . . . being superficial, having an empty mind? There is nothing he thinks of that could worry him, and I think – remember, and worry. But how I want to be someone! He doesn’t think, but he succeeds . . . or does he think, perhaps? I should very much like to find out. Were I to swap places with him, have his popularity, imagine how far I could go! Such a difference I could make . . . peace . . . lock away my father and others of his kind! But I’m awkward and weak and I will never have anything or anyone. Birth, maybe it’s all luck. I could love all of these people, if they didn’t . . . despise me. And I do - I am kind; they know this without thinking it, anyway, I don’t want to be like them.” Any help would be very appreciated, thanks.