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    How does one describe.....

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by gala, Dec 27, 2012.

    Hello everyone. I hope you all had a pleasant holiday and are excited about the New Year. :)

    I am taking my first shot at sci-fi and I am writing a group of scenes that include: an escape, a spaceshuttle crash, and someone discovering the survivor. I have the bare basics written, but I would love to see what input you guys had.
     
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    What kind of input are you looking for?
     
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    I'm trying to figure out how to describe the action as well as the crash. What I have currently is really bland. Any helpful keywords, etc.
     
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    I'm afraid this is too general for any specific advices. It could be useful for you to read a story or more with similar settings and situations and find your inspiration there.
     
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    Can you post what you have so we can give more specific feedback?
     
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    Keywords are not going to help you that much. Making a crash evocative and/or exciting is more about the structure of the paragraphs and sentences.
     
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    This is kind of what it means to be a writer. Not to make you feel bad, but I'm sure everyone grapples with how to describe something. You just sit there looking at your monitor like a dork until something comes.

    It gets easier, but not without a struggle.
     
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    I would recommend fulfilling the requirements for the Review Room (looks like you have enough posts, but there's the review requirement and there may be a days since first post requirement?) and then posting an excerpt for comments. I know that doesn't sound all that helpful, but this is a question that requires a very specific answer based on your writing style, and that's really only doable in the Review Room.
     

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