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    Ideas

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by Leaka, Dec 24, 2007.

    I need ideas for my story The Box.

    I always like the most disturbing and most painful torture I can bring. I need help with ideas of torture.
    I don't know what kind of shower to give the character.
    The main character doesn't want to take a shower and I need to think what kind of shower it should be.
     
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    Pardon, is it what kind of shower he doesn't want to take or the shower he'll take even if he doesn't want to?

    Anyhow, you could have something other than blood in the shower (because that is cliched). Snakes? Minced snakes? Minced eyeballs? Leeches? Mercury (mercury poisoning isn't very lovely)? Pure concentrated HCl/H2SO4?
    Now you can have something in the bath tub, like a vomit of undigested human remains, a paste of dead flies, dissected human body, or something like that.
    I don't know if that's what you were looking for, didn't read your story, but I hope I helped.
     
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    I decided that since he has burns wouldn't it be fun to put the shower with antidotes for burns.

    Cause it hurts when you clean your wounds.

    Also I just gave him a Flesh Pot Pie.

    I should make my statement clearer:

    I want help organizing perfect torture scenes. Ones no one has seen before. Something that will make the reader sick from reading it.
     
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    Well, avoid blood, zombies and anything like it! :) Because they are so cliched.
     
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    As in...using dead bodies yadi yada stuff...I'm just being general - no specifications.
     
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    Well you aren't really helping the brainstorming process by being specific.

    Your suppose to post what you think would be a good idea for a torture scene.
     
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    why would you want to make the readers sick with such sickening stuff?... isn't there enough of the real thing in this evil-rife world without you thinking up more and 'better' ways to ill-treat your fellow creatures?... have you discussed this with your shrink?... if you don't have one, maybe you or your parents should consider it...

    btw, i'm not writing this to be mean or only to be judgmental, but out of genuine concern for your welfare in that you may need help/counseling, if you obsess over this kind of stuff...

    love and hugs, maia
     
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    I guess.

    Don't use:
    Blood
    Dead bodies
    Fire

    May use:
    Ice
    Chopping/Dicing/hit and trials
    Eyes
    Intestines
    Jaw
    Vomits
    Insects
    Snakes
    leeches
    Similar animals

    Clear enough?
     
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    Ice! That's a good one, anthraxx!
     
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    Because I like those kind of stories. I like to make the readers sick. I like expressing evil.
    Evil is a good thing.
    Without evil the world wouldn't be balanced.
     
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    Lol, I don't think Leaka needs counseling, Maia. Most people who write horror tend to be fine. :)
     
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    I write horror to make myself feel fine and well balanced Maia. I can't say I'm thrilled with the Leaka's idea, but I've done similar to relieve tension in my own life. Better to let it all flow out the end of the pen than the end of a fist or saying cruel words to people you care about.
     
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    Think of the torture toys off the Saw movies... They were made out of ordinary items that you would pick up in a scrapyard.

    Think originality.
     
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    True.
    So true.
    And I don't need a counselor. I'm fine.
    I just want to refresh the genre of Horror. No one wants to do it original anymore.
    I want to redo horror and make it worse then ever before.
    I want to make people want to border their windows and doors.
     
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    That's quite a dream you have there, Leaka! :D
     
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    Yes it is.
    But the point of horror is to make people scared out of their wits. Lose control of their functions and make their bones chill.
     
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    OOO! Scary! :D
     
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    You're smiling!
    That's not a good sign. I guess I'm going to have to make the smile disappear into shock or something.:)


    Anyone else have any ideas?
     
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    The master could pretend to be nice at the party, but then the kid could talk out of turn or do something 'bad' and then back at the house, the boy could get some kind of severe punishment. Just a thought. :)
     
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    Nope I have better bigger plans.
    So wrong and so horrible you'll either close your eyes and wonder if it is done and gone.
    Or you'll read more and more.
     
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    Sweet... or not so sweet! Can't wait, Leaka! :)
     
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    Knowing the story.
    What do you think kid?
    There has never been a sweet moment.
     
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    True dat. (hehe, I've been hanging out with ghetto kids lately...)

    I commented btw!
     
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    I noticed:

    I am the wicked creature who walks the threads. I read everything and absorb everything.
    I can tell whether there is a wicked man upon us. I can also see with my eyes in the back of my head.

    lol!
     

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