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  1. Darwinian

    Darwinian New Member

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    Grammar Is "Oh how is it worth to wander !" correct ?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Darwinian, Jul 30, 2016.

    Hello !

    English is not my native language and, strangely, as I proofread them, my sentences feel more and more untrustworthy.
    I'm not a frequent writer either... But for a gift I wrote this :
    In a world of wonder
    With spontaneous enough of a paresse, Oh how
    is it worth to wander !​
    * paresse is french for lazyness. I love how close it sounds from caress.

    I'm mostly uncertain about "Oh how is it worth to wander !" (note that it is an exclamation). I thought about "Oh it is worth to wander !" before this version and "Oh how much is it worth to wander !" after. I like the rythm more the way I presented it, but I'd rather be grammatically correct, for any of the three lines, for that matter.

    Thank you !
     
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    I don't know the French well enough to know if the second line could be "With spontaneous enough paresse". If it could, I think the rhythm would be more pleasing, at least to my ear. And then, for the final line, what exactly are you wanting to say? That it's worthwhile to wander? I think I'd find the meaning more clear with either of your alternative lines--"How is it worth to wander" doesn't really mean much, to me.
     
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    obsidian_cicatrix I ink, therefore I am. Contributor

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    Hmmm.... I'm no expert, but I am a native speaker. I'd be more inclined to have it read:

    Oh, how it is worth it to wander!

    And Bayview's: 'With spontaneous enough paresse' sounds much better to my ear. Much less confusing too.
     
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    worthy
     
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  5. Darwinian

    Darwinian New Member

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    Thank you all for your help !

    You can simply replace paresse with "lazyness". They are almost no change in meaning, only in rythm.

    Yeah, I'm vastly uncertain... I do intend to mean that it is worthwhile to wander. Using a question-word this way does work for an exclamation, then ? I'm feeling more and more doubtful.

    First and last line shouldn't change, they are echoes of each other. I'd rather truncate a "it".

    "worthy" seems great for that part.
     
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    'worthy' has a rather different meaning to 'worth' - but nobody else need know :)
     
  7. Darwinian

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    I can imagine that worthy is for one that holds values and follow them, almost in a religious way... If it is so, it still goes ok with the meaning, after all, with the same word root (is root correct, here ? ) it cannot derive too far away...
     
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    Use 'worthy' otherwise it makes no sense.
     
  9. Darwinian

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    That is what I ended up doing, thank you for your help.
     
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