Summary: a widowed English business man hires an old flame from the past to nanny his twelve year old daughter. This story is set in 1940s England. Analie Imogene Newbury: She is very feisty and adventurous. Although stubborn at times which leads to her own self destruction. Analie's sexuality is beginning to bud, which is all to confusing due to not having a motherly presence in her life. She attempts to bond with her father, but she can't even begin to understand her farther's different way of loving her, and much to her dismay this love does not include any of ways she wishes he would love her. When Analie finds an old diary of her mom's leading up to the events of her death, she becomes suspicious of her nanny, although she tries to hide how thoroughly irritated she is because no one else seems to notice something is not quite right with her nanny. Analie holds the diary close to her heart, for it is the only evidence that some human being on this planet actually truly loved her. So how does that sound for a character? Hopefully she sounds nothing like Bella swan.
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I haven't the slightest idea whether the character is nice. That will depend on how you write her. The larger thought I had, was why a 12 year old would need a nanny, especially a new one. I could see it if the nanny had been around for a while, and they just weren't getting rid of her. But 12 seems old for a new nanny, especially in the 1940s. Unless "nanny" was a pretense on the part of the father for bringing the old love interest back into his life.
Well, firstly Bella Swan is obsessed with being in love, then with being depressed and a whole bunch of other self-centred nonsense. This has potential plot-wise, especially if you're planning to go way off the deep end. Character-wise though, it's not possible to tell if your character is "nice". Firstly, because most of what you have described are either summary traits (feisty, adventurous, stubborn, maturing sexually) or narrative points (doing this, trying that, worrying about x,y and z). "Niceness" is typically carried through the basic actions of the character - how they conduct themselves on a moment to moment basis. At this point I see very little to be concerned about (you might want to check up on your historical accuracy) but the specific question you've asked in unanswerable given what we've been told.
Hello, Moderator. I would ask if you would move this thread to the appropriate one for character development.
Can you sum up a friend's personality from a drier license application? From an obituary? A paragraph in a high school yearbook? The character has no dimension until the reader sees him or her interacting with other characters and responding to situations. The totality of the writing, not a descriptive summary, is what will give the reader an impression of what the character is like.
