I'm working on a short story - this is the opening sentence but I'm wondering if it's too telling - Leo tilted the mirror to avoid his reflection. Here's the alternative scene ( bedroom instead of bathroom ) which I thought might be too whimsical and dull ( talking about holes in socks ) - Leo pulls on a sock and his big toe comes popping out of a new hole. Other people might say damn, not Leo. He just looks at his toe, picks off a bit of fluff caught on the edge of the ragged nail before grabbing a Bic pen off his night stand. Then he draws a face on the pad of his big toe. A smiling face.