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    ithestargazer - Weekly Poetry Contest (195) Winner

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Banzai, Jun 15, 2012.

    The Rage
    by ithestargazer


    I capture the thought and hold it between
    my splintered fingers, never knowing if I'd
    have the courage to let it linger beyond
    the few moments I surrender to the
    rage. The weight begins to
    fracture, to wake the
    girl who has never
    slept, to wake
    her up, and
    watch her
    break.
     
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    Congratulations, stargazer!

    I particularly like the use of rhythm as expressed in the decreasing line lengths. To me, that felt like that explosive burst of rage, which often dissipates rapidly into regret.
     
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    Thanks Cog, I'm really loving the poetry section at the moment. Hopefully I can continue to expand my work :)
     
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    Good job - a very poignant poem, with sadness beneath the rage.
     
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