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    Lauren - Weekly Poetry Contest (108) Winner

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    Pages torn off calendars
    By Lauren


    Pages torn off calendars
    mark the daylight hours
    that separate Monday from Tuesday.
    Calculated. Controlled.

    The unhalting beats
    by which we set our clocks
    march steadily on,
    indifferent.

    And We the frenzied masses
    scurry through this mass of time -
    neatly apportioned by our own canon -
    as summer becomes autumn,
    as we thaw and grow and freeze and die.

    Repeat.
     
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    Congratulations. Great climax to the piece. Well paced. Well done.
     
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    Great poem Lauren with a brilliant ending.
     
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    Thank you both, very much!
     
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    Well written banzai.

    "Repeat" highlights the repetition of coming components within a cycle.
    Seasonal change "calculated, controlled" through the daily routine of tearing "pages...off calenders" and setting our clocks to "unhalting beats" is the idea i gain from this piece that expresses a detachment from observing nature and onto a method of observing an arbituary time.

    It was enjoyed. Thank You
     
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    Keep up eh son ?

    The beauty and essence of the written word is that you take the time to read it. Even the less interesting stuff like whose poem this actually is !! :rolleyes:
     
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