http://www.writingforums.org/threads/rain-when-i-die-ch-01-890-words-pg-13-language.129802/ This is a link to chapter one of my latest MS (the latest revision is toward the bottom of the page.) Because the crux of the story line is the contents of Alesia's diary, showing her emotional decline and eventual suicide, how much should I be putting into the opening narrative (told from her older sister's POV)? The point of the opening is to give a brief intro to the MC, and tell the story of how she died to give the reader an initial connection to the MC e.g. "who is this person and why should I care what's in her diary?" I'm just wondering if you all think I should cut it down from 3-4 chapters, make things a bit more concise, and save some of this info (like the fact she has just been diagnosed HIV positive) for later on.